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Sun's Fire Part 2 by MisterAibo Sun's Fire Part 2 by MisterAibo
Part 2 out of 3. Because dA doesn't like large things.
Making this took forever and I think it could use some more work.
Any input is highly appreciated.

1st page
2nd page
3rd page

Music: [link]
Time taken: 30 hours? I dunno, forever.

Now translated to LA Spanish! Fuego del Sol
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kraqen Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012
Oh! FINALLY! One persone who doesn't make a Lion King version of celestia and discord...
MacabreCat Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
silentsteel Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
Still shivering - I'm mesmerized.
Rowan193 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
- "The pony mare" I think might be better as "That Alicorn".
- I guess the only thing I can suggest with Discord not being a man is, again to replace it with "...thing", although that might be a bit tedious. "I ignored that I'm not of your pony clan" or "I didn't realise I can't do what you can" might fit depending on the message you're trying to send re: why Celestia has rejected him.
- "Don't let that fire sear my flesh and bone" could be changed to something to do with stone. "Don't turn my charming visage into stone" would fit an ordinary characterization for Discord but isn't quite serious enough for this context. "Don't break my heart and turn the shreds to stone" maybe?
- I'm not sure about the message of the last line on the page, the second bit is a bit disjointed compared to the first bit. Not sure which to suggest changing.
MisterAibo Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
- It might, but I didn't think of it.
- Discord is a man. And in my head, he didn't start up as a draconequus. I have a whole story in production right now. Celestia didn't reject him because he looks the way he does. She rejected him because of the things he did.
- I wasn't referring to the love he feels burning him like fire. He doesn't know what the spell she wants to cast will do - and he's not desperate because of the fact that she could kill him. It's the fact that she doesn't want to be with him.
- Well, it should have indicated that although he is seared by love and life with Celestia rejecting him is painful, he still wouldn't give his feelings up.
Rowan193 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
- ...So this is a semantics issue. I think man means human. You think "male person", I'm guessing? Well, that's fine.
- If they don't know what the spell actually does, you can forget the suggestions I have based on the stoniness, although now that I know it's that, I feel the metaphor gets worn out a little by repetition.
- Okay, so in that case "and better still than being all alone" doesn't feel right. I can only seem to read that as trying to convince Celestia that she's lonely, and that she *needs* him. Also, I'd suggest "It burns me like the fires of hell" as a modification for the first part, although I think that's just my personal preference.
Tifa-the-Strange Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011
I seriously want Jon de Lancie to sing this song just for us bronies ;A;
It would blow minds away! D8
MisterAibo Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011
Or Tony Jay. That'd be truly awesome.
We still need Alan Menken to take a long, good look at the lyrics, though.
Stahi Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
Tony Jay died. :c
MisterAibo Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
I know. It's a shame.
Tifa-the-Strange Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Hey, Alan Menken better love these lyrics, or else D8<
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